Содержание эссе С2 в задании 40 Раздела Письмо в ЕГЭ по английскому языку.
Работа над содержанием эссе С2 является основной, так как от ее выполнения зависит оценят или нет эксперты данное задание. Важно внимательно прочитать тему сочинения и план, и определиться с позицией, что является аргументом, а что - контраргументом, и не путать их. На примере выполненной работы разберем содержание С2.
Из Macmillan Exams Skills for Russia 2015
Test 11
40 Comment on the following
"Just as teachers assess their students, so students should assess their teachers."
What is your opinion? Do you agree with this statement?
Write 200-250 words.
Use the following plan:
* make an introduction (state the problem)
* express your personal opinion and give 2-3 reasons for your opinion
* express an opposing opinion and give 1-2 reasons for this opposing opinion
* explain why you don't agree with the opposing opinion
* make a conclusion restating your position
Аргументы и контраргументы с точки зрения автора эссе:
+ the subordination should exists
+ estimates of a teacher can be unfair
+ any kind of discipline increases a working capacity of pupils.
- the pupil's assessiment of the teacher renders a direct influence to his attitudes to different subjects
- it is important for children to adapt in this world
" 1 Some people consider that it is absolutely normal when a teacher dominates in class. While others claim that the participants of the formational process should have equal rights and can assess each other. Let us have a deeper look inside this problem. 42 слова
2 On the one hand, a teacher should remain on his leading position.
First of all, the subordination should exist.
The relationships between both sides should be official.
Personal pupil's opinion can destroy a working atmosphere in a class, generate disrespect and disapproval of other members of the group.
Secondly, pupil's estimates of a teacher can be unfair.
Bsides, numerous quarells with parents are possible.
As a result, there is a risk of a loss of a job by the teacher. Thirdly, strict discipline increases pupils' working ability. 77 слов
3 On the other hand, nowdays people are equal in dignity and rights.
In addition, the pupil's assessment of the teacher renders a direct influence to his attitude to different subjects.
Negative assessments of pedagogical work can take away a desire to study that dicipline in the future. 47 слов
4 In my humble opinion, as we live at a democratic age, so every person has the right to be respected. Though, people should esteem each other and not allow strict assessments influence either teachers or pupils. 36 слов
5 Taking everything into account I would like to say that everyone has their own attitude to this problem.
But in spite of this, no one can deny that estimation is one of the permanent parts of our life." 37 слов
(Работу выполнила Полина K.)
Анализируем аргументы + и контраргументы - в данном эссе по абзацам:
2
+ a teacher should remain on his leading position
+ the subordination should exist
+ official relationships between students and teachers
Personal pupil's opinion can
- *destroy a working atmosphere in a class
- * generate disrespect
- * generate disapproval of other members of the group
- * pupil's estimates of a teacher can be unfair
- * quarells with parents
- * a risk of a loss of a job by the teacher
+ * strict discipline increases pupils' working ability
3
+ * people are equal in dignity and rights
- * the pupil's assessment of the teacher renders a direct influence to his - attitude to different subjects
- * negative assessments of pedagogical work can take away a desire to study that dicipline in the future
4
+ * every person has the right to be respected
+ * people should esteem each other
+ * people should not allow strict assessments influence either teachers or pupils
5
+ * estimation is one of the permanent parts of our life
Видим нарушения:
пересекающиеся контраргументы - в абзаце 2, а аргументы + в абзаце 3
Редактируем эссе в соответствии с аргументами и контраргументами:
"Just as teachers assess their students, so students should assess their teachers."
What is your opinion? Do you agree with this statement?
Write 200-250 words.
Use the following plan:
* make an introduction (state the problem)
* express your personal opinion and give 2-3 reasons for your opinion
* express an opposing opinion and give 1-2 reasons for this opposing opinion
* explain why you don't agree with the opposing opinion
* make a conclusion restating your position
1 Some people consider that it is absolutely normal when a teacher dominates in class. While others claim that the participants of the formational process should have equal rights and can assess each other. Let us have a deeper look inside this problem. 42 слов
+ students should assess their teachers: 2-3 reasons
2 On the one hand, people nowdays are equal in dignity and rights. This means that not only teachers can esteem their students but the students can assess their teachers, as well. Firstly, pupil's assessmate of a teacher can refer to different aspects, either personal or professional. Secondly, the most important aspect of students' estimation of their teachers is the results of teaching. Thirdly, only students can decide whether the way of teaching is interesting or boring. 75 слов
- only teachers should assess their students: 1-2 reasons
3 On the other hand, teacher's estimation of students is mainly fair as a teacher is an experienced and educated spesialist. So, a teacher should remain on his leading position as strict discipline increases pupils' working ability and the quality of knowledge. Besides, the relationships between both sides should be official and the subordination should exist. 55 слов
+ I don't agree with the opinion that only teachers should assess their students and I do agree with the statement "Just as teachers assess their students, so students should assess their teachers."
4 In my opinion, students should assess their teachers and students' point of view can be useful while making desisions concerning methods of teaching. I realise that pupils' estimation of teachers can be unfair but people should esteem each other honestly and respectfuly, and avoid strict assessments influencing either teachers or pupils. 51 словo
5 Finally, I should notice that everyone has their own attitude to this problem. But no one can deny that students' estimation of teachers' work is very helpful. 27 слов
Итого 250 слов.
Краткий план работы над содержанием С2.
Перед началом работы нужно провести МОЗГОВОЙ ШТУРМ: на заданную тему выписать все возможные аргументы «ЗА» и «ПРОТИВ». Важно: Если аргументов «ПРОТИВ» становится больше, то они автоматически превращаются в аргументы «ЗА», конечно, с сохранением смысла и следуя плану эссе. Следите за объемом - заменяйте, отбрасывайте ненужное.
* Деление сочинения на абзацы: 1,2,3,4,5.
* 1 абзац – постановка проблемы: перефразирование темы эссе.
* 2 абзац – 3 аргумента «ЗА»: + + + МНЕНИЕ АВТОРА
* 3 абзац – 2 аргумента «ПРОТИВ»: - - КОНТРАРГУМЕНТ
* 4 абзац – 2 аргумента «ЗА»: ++ МНЕНИЕ АВТОРА ПРОТИВ КОНТРАРГУМЕНТА
* 5 абзац – 1 аргумент «ЗА»: +, суммирующий МНЕНИЕ АВТОРА в виде уточнений, обобщений и синонимов и = 1 абзацу
Денель М.Ю. 21.05.2016
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